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I hate to criticize anything of yours because your Vonnegut quote is frigin awesome, but I'd have to agree with the critique above. This is not a poem. This is ...

I liked this a lot. Four lines, four ideas about one thing (yellow) that I could've never of thought of, and for that I'm fond of this. It rhymes and ...

Nice poem. I especially liked the ending, it was by far the strongest part of the piece. I'd have to agree about the rhyming, but to be honest if I ...

"I was to marry him and bare his children and take care of his house." -- I'd take the first and out, and replace it with a comma, so it ...

This was a really nice read, makes me wish I was that person worthy enough to deserve that poem in his/her's honor! Only the last line bothered me: "I really ...

Have you done a re-write of this, I'd love to read it? This was good. I have to agree with one of the previous critiques about all the punctuation. It ...

I liked this. I like Haiku's, but I'm very picky about them b/c people usually aren't very good at them, b/c I find most people that try and write them ...

I liked the motif of the dakota. I think personally you could fit something about him reading Catcher in the Rye in the dakota, like have imagery of the book ...

This was a very interesting piece of writing for a 60yr old lady lol. Well, I don't know if this turned me on, off, scared me, made me think of ...

I'd have to agree with the other reviews, the fourth line made me stop because it seemed out of place. This was well done though. I liked it a lot. ...

This is a good first poem All the periods though for such short lines threw me off. I'd comma or semicolon after every line and before the next. I'd take ...

This flowed really well and I found myself engaged the entire time. The only thing that felt out of place was this line: … I feel like I’m falling This ...

Now comes the interesting part I personally am not into this kind of stuff, even if it is a sarcastic teenage narrator, just tell me the part. Also, i disagree ...

Ha-ha, no, no it's not suppose to be from a horse's perspective, that's interesting that you thought that though! It's a humorous piece, suppose to be a guy sitting on ...

I'd have to agree with Cade, but what I would recommend is keep writing those types of things to get them out of your system, and then take those ideals ...